Bangkok novel? Is this story any good?

[leosuntime]

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Chapter 1

The boy walked across the grass oval while looking into the sun. The sunshine radiated his face. He reached the exact centre of the oval and then stopped. He then did something that was extremely strange. The other school children who were eating their lunch at the edge of the oval were now watching the boy with intense scrutiny. "What is he doing?" The children whispered to each other. The boy got down on to his hands and knees and started to wiggle his fingers into the earth. Deeper and deeper he plunged his fingers. He then kicked off his sandals and started to do the same with his toes. The boy remain in that position not moving for a long time. Finally he stood up and brushed the dirt off his knees. He then walked back across the oval to a golden haired girl who was waiting patiently for him. "Why do u always do that?" she whispered looking around. She adjusted his collar and then started to pick bits of grass from his shirt. "Do what?" the boy looked at her in surprise. The girl raised one eye brow and studied the boy's innocent looking face for a few seconds. "Well, at lunch time you always walk out into the middle of the oval and stick your fingers into the ground....." she paused looking for a reaction on his face. The boy didn't seem to understand judging by his blank stare, so she continued. "I think it is very strange" she said to him bluntly. She plucked the last piece of grass from his brown hair. "Yeah?" said the boy. "Now that you mention it... I do suppose that it is a little strange." The girl raised both her eyebrows at him. "A little?" She chuckled. The boy looked away from her "You know, I don't know why I do it, but how about you. Why are you always following-". The lunch bell suddenly rang and the boy stopped speaking for a few seconds. He then continued speaking, "we have our sports class now" he said. "I am really looking forward to sports today! "Another thing," said the girl. "Why do you always have to do it, in exactly the middle of the oval?" she called after him. The boy was already walking to sports class. "I need a lot of room," he called back to her. "Room?" She was running to catch up. "Room for what?" The boy and girl walked further down the oval together, to meet their teacher for sports class. The sports teacher had already arrived and was laying out orange marker hats on the oval. The rest of the students started to arrive. Every one seemed very cheerful. Sports class was very popular among the students. "We are going to have a running race today," the sports teacher said without looking up from a clip board. "Make sure you all stretch please!. After everybody had done their stretches and all the students had lined up at the starting line. The sports teacher raised his arm into the air and fired a cap gun. With a loud pop the race started. That is when the boy did something else that was extremely strange for the second time that day. The boy rocketed off the starting line as if he had literally exploded from a canon. His small body was moving around the oval so fast that it was a blur. All the children staggered to a stop and now stood watching in disbelief as the boy practically flew around the oval and back to the starting line in mere seconds. The boy stopped at the finishing line and was not even panting. He was now standing with an eerily straight posture and was looking straight up into the sun, again! Some body coughed. The boy looked away from the sun and saw that everyone was staring at him. There was a complete silence. Nobody said a word. A crow cawed behind the boy. The boy looked behind himself, just to check that it wasn't something else that they were looking at. He then looked back at them and threw his arms up in confusion. "What?" said the boy. Every one flinched in fear as the boy threw up his hands. The golden haired girl suddenly ran over to the boy. She grabbed his hand and hissed at him "I think we've gotta go, now!" She launched into a run straight out of the school gate and down the road dragging him behind her. The children and the sports teacher looked even more baffled. The teacher suddenly called out to them. "Hey, you can't leave the school grounds!" The teacher ran after the kids but they were both long gone. The two children jogged down the back allies through the town still holding hands. The girl chose a path that was least likely to have people on it. "You have to tell me who you are. Or what you are" the girl said. She looked back at the boy running behind her. After a short pause an unexpected answer suddenly came from the boy. "I have to go into the mountains" he said. "The mountains?" the girl repeated slowly. She was shaking and nodding her head at the same time. After a moment of thought the girl relaxed and smiled a big beaming smile. "Yeah! Ok..." she said. "The mountains! Why not?" The girl had goose bumps all over her body. She immediately changed their course. Hand in hand they disappeared into the dark forest at the edge of the small town. Something was going to happen in the mountains, something really big and the world would never be the same!

[Boo]

This doesn't seem to have any thai relevance. You need a writing group not thaivisa.

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