Sawasdee  Khrup, 

 

Well, maybe not your antidote for seasonal affective disorder SAD ... after all, you may be singing "sittin' on top of the world," far from any equatorial depression, roosting in that transiently trans-cultural ecstatic zone within Amazing Thailand you might call "My Own Private Idaho."

 

Is "thinking about leaving" a more fruitful train of thought than ... thinking about ... haiku ? How many cars are between your locomotive and your caboose ?

 

Here's a clean wall, an air brush, the paint, the tools you need to make stencils ... to let loose: in three lines, one of which is 7 syllables, two of which are 5 syllables.

 

I'll throw this in the pot for starters:

 

mango season memories,

in dark October:

keep a heart alive

 

ความทรงจำฤดูมะม่วง

ตุลาคมที่มืด

รักษาหัวใจไว้

 

cheers, ~o:37;

9 minutes ago, orang37 said:

in three lines, one of which is 7 syllables, two of which are 5 syllables.

That applies to Japanese language. We English speakers may be forgiven for not being so circumscribed.

 

I miss the Thai winter

it was pleasantly cool, but now

I suffer the cold air

 

5 hours ago, thaibeachlovers said:

 

I miss the Thai winter

it was pleasantly cool, but now

I suffer the cold air

 

 

you are our first winner  ! 

 

p.s. all suggestions for structure are made tongue-in-cheeky on this forum where the  nominal thread topic is usually a goal-post that moves as egos and libidos take their turns rewriting the rules of the game.

All this useless talk

Hot air from a cold heart

Be Water

Songkran night 2020

 

i'm waiting for the full moon

to break through the clouds:

damn loud firecrackers

14 hours ago, canthai55 said:

All this useless talk

Hot air from a cold heart

Be Water

 

You are absolutely a winner, and, please accept the opinion of someone who has been immersed in poetry for over 65 years that there is real depth in your work.

 

Hope you'll forgive my munging your text slightly to fit a 7-5-5 syllabic pattern:

 

This useless conversation,

Hot air from cold hearts:

So, be the Water !

I think, therefore I am

Or do I think I am ?

Endless circle

 

Orange Clown of Death

Vanquished on November 3rd

Happy sings the heart